On Sunday, October 15, 2017 at 10:31:12 AM UTC-4, George Dance
Winterworld Descending, by Will Dockery
1. Stopwatch
My wayward muse,
I am still in the bewilderness.
Leave it to me,
A mute passing notes to a blind man.
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https://gdancesbetty.blogspot.ca/2017/10/winterworld-descending-will-dockery.html
Outstanding job, George,
Thanks; I had some good poems to work with.
will comment more later, in the middle of some real life errands...
I don't expect you to criticize your own poem. But I'd be happy to
keep the conversation going.
Here's something that occurred to me, on rereading: Why does the
woman in "She Likes Bossa Nova" like "red red wine"? I was thinking
about that while listening to Chrissie Hynde, when she gave me the
answer: "She" liked the song. At that point, I could imagine her and
Help me forget that I still need her so...
All I can do I've done, but memories won't go
http://youtu.be/BeJ55sUacPM
You mention Chrissie Hynde, to me she is a poet of heart rending
magnitude.
When she sings "I saw a picture of you..."
I almost feel like I could break down and cry, every time, year after
year.
http://youtu.be/radFwHzD-PM
It's a good 'objective correlative' (as Eliot would say). And not a cliche,
if it's used in a fresh manner. Note how HH, probably the most
cliche-resistant poet in the group, worked it into his last poem:
A photograph fell from a dislodged book
that wouldn't rest quite right upon the shelf.
But, a lot of "Back on the Chain Gang"'s appeal isn't poetic, in the sense
that the power of the song comes from the musical arrangement, not (as in
poetry) from the words alone.
Notice for instance how the theme of nostalgia is heightened by the
background vocals on the chorus, directly copied from Sam Cooke's "Chain
Gang."
Martin Chambers is working his biography...stay tuned for his account..
That should be interesting as Hell, some details only he or Chrissie
witnessed and lived to tell.
I'm reading a biography on Billy Joel now, a fascinating figure who
turned /his/ autobiography into melodies... singing his songs, the Piano
Man...
I like Billy, too, but that's enough about music for now.
Time to dedicate a Saturday Dancehall to Billy Joel, eh?